IMPROVE YOUR ENGLISH TUTORING SERVICES April 2012 Newsletter

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College Focus:

San Jose State University

New SAT Rules for October 2012

The Right Word: Affect vs. Effect
Strunk & White Tip: Strunk and White’s Rule 8
Recommended.Reading: Kipling’s Kim
Spring Break Classes:

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SAT English
Shakespeare’s Richard II
Sherlock Holmes in A Study in Scarlet

SPRING QUARTER
SAT NEWS

New SAT Rules Start in October
Cheater Faces Four Years in Prison

As a result of last autumn’s cheating scandal, SAT test administrators have tightened test security for the October test.

  • Students will have to submit a current photo when registering for the exams.
  • On test day, supervisors will have access to an online register of the photos and a roster of students with their name, date of birth, gender, test type, and high school.
  • When the students arrive at the testing site, they will be required to show both their photo admission ticket and another acceptable form of identification.
  • Students will also no longer be able to change testing sites or decide to take a different test on test day. After the exam, high schools will receive scores for all test-takers from that school, along with student information and photos to review.

Sam Eshaghoff, a 19-year-old college student who took the SAT for other students, faces charges of scheming to defraud, criminal impersonation, and falsifying business records.  He faces a maximum of four years in state prison.

A New York state legislator wants felony charges for parents who pay to help students cheat.

 

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COLLEGE FOCUS

San Jose State University
Silicon Valley’s Paycheck Powerhouse

San Jose State University’s recent graduates are some of the best paid in the nation, earning an average of $53,500 a year during the first five years after graduation, according to a survey by payscale.com. And students from SJSU’s engineering departments—collectively rated 14th in the nation among colleges offering bachelor’s and master’s degrees—earn much more. 

All San Jose State University students, including those in technical majors, must pass the Writing Skills Test by their junior year. San Jose State English professor Scott Rice helped institute this exam more than 20 years ago in response to requests from Silicon Valley companies and other employers.

“The most important secrets to passing this English test are to try hard, read the directions very carefully, and follow them,” he said. “Although the test is difficult for many students, especially if their native language isn’t English, the reading and writing skills needed to graduate from San Jose State are the same skills needed to be successful in any career.”

Many SJSU students go to work right after earning their degrees, but some, such as Tin Tran, go on to prestigious graduate schools. Tran, who studied with Improve Your English for four years while at Los Gatos High School, will start at Tufts University School of Dental Medicine next fall.

“Going to SJSU saved me a lot of money and allowed me to spend a few more years with my family before I move to Boston for dental school,” Tran says.

“The facilities for the sciences are just as good as at UC schools, and the lab classes are usually taught by PhDs, not graduate students.”

Tran’s younger brother, Tan, also attends SJSU. Although admitted to Berkeley, he chose to stay in San Jose for his undergraduate education. Like his brother, Tan plans to enter either dental or medical school.

SJSU students have the chance to rub shoulders with people from the world’s most important technology companies. Dennis Schaaf, a native of Germany who studied with Improve Your English in 2004, graduated from SJSU with a degree in mechanical engineering. As a senior, he interned with Tesla Motors, now Silicon Valley’s hottest start-up. Many of SJSU’s programs offer internships with prestigious Bay Area companies including NVidia, Aruba Networks, Cisco Systems, and Yahoo!

SJSU is part of America’s largest university—the 23-campus California State University system, which spans 773 miles from San Diego to Humboldt. The CSU campuses have more than 430,000 students, with San Jose State contributing 29,000 students to the total. The university adds billions of dollars to California’s economy and trains 40% of the state’s engineers.

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WRITING TIP
 
  Steve High,
president

Strunk and White’s Rule 8:
Use a dash to set off an abrupt break or interruption and to announce a long appositive or summary.

by Steve High

With a dash
Strunk and White’s Elements of Style gives an example of each of three appropriate ways to use a dash:

Interruption Appositive Concluding Phrase
His first thought on getting out of bed—if he had any thought at all—was to get back in again. The rear axle began to make a noise—a grinding, chattering, teeth-gritting rasp. The increasing reluctance of the sun to rise, the extra nip in the breeze, the patter of shed leaves dropping—all the evidences of fall drifting into winter were clearer each day.

Without a dash
Compare three less effective versions of the above sentences:

Interruption Appositive Concluding Phrase
His first thought on getting out of bed, if he had any thought at all, was to get back in again. The rear axle began to make a noise, a grinding, chattering, teeth-gritting rasp. The increasing reluctance of the sun to rise, the extra nip in the breeze, the patter of shed leaves dropping.  All the evidences of fall drifting into winter were clearer each day.

Words enclosed between dashes in the middle of a sentence interrupt the reader’s train of thought and call attention to the interruption. In The Moon and Sixpence, Somerset Maugham interrupts a sentence about jealousy with a comment that intensifies his observation:

I supposed that for some reason or other—and Heaven knows what ingenuity men exercise to torment themselves—Dirk had got it into his head that his wife cared for Strickland. (Chapter 28)

Words following a dash at the end of a sentence bring the reader up short. As Bruce Ross-Larson in Stunning Sentences writes, a dash near the end of a sentence “forces your readers to momentarily reflect on what precedes the dash—and then flings them into what follows.”

New York is a city ripe with extremes—of wealth and poverty, of creative energy and rage. (Chapter 7, Stark Attachments)

Finally, a dash that introduces a phrase at the end of a lengthy sentence may effectively summarize what has gone before; Joseph Conrad does so in this passage from Almayer’s Folly.

The cooking shed was his favorite place, and he became an habitual guest there, squatting for hours amongst the busy women, with his chin resting on his knees, his lean arms clasped round his legs, and his one eye roving uneasily—the very picture of watchful ugliness. (Chapter 4)

The dash is useful in its place, but don’t use it as a sloppy all-purpose connective. Instead, use a semicolon when the connection between two ideas is obvious and intimate (Rule 5); use a colon when the following words explain or elaborate what has just gone before (Rule 7).

Dashes, semicolons, and colons are showy marks of punctuation that sometimes call more attention to themselves than to the words of your sentence; use commas and periods for most purposes.

For answers to specific writing questions, email us here. Who knows? Your question may inspire our next article on Writing Tips.

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THE RIGHT WORD
 
  Jen Jebens,
tutor


Affect vs. Effect

Many students confuse these two words because they sound alike.

Affect is most commonly used as a verb. It means “to act on or produce a change in.”

April showers affect my garden, promoting beautiful May flowers.
The novel affected Liz profoundly, and she became an author later in her life.

Effect is most commonly used as a noun. It means “a result or consequence of a cause.”

The invention of wireless communication has had a profound effect on the way we communicate.
Good nutrition and proper rest have a positive effect on students’ ability to concentrate in class.

Other Uses of Affect

Affect can also be used as a verb to mean “to make a false display of.”

Despite his sorrow, James managed to affect a pleasant smile during the party.

As a noun, affect means “a mental state, usually demonstrated physically.” This meaning most often applies to facial expression.

The lawyer, noticing a lack of remorse or other emotion in the criminal, described his affect as flat.

Other Uses of Effect

Effect can also be a noun meaning “meaning or intention.”

My teacher was displeased with my grades and wrote my parents a letter to that effect.

As a verb, effect means “to bring about or implement.”

The activist knew that to effect a change in environmental policy he had to get the voters to write to their congressmen.

The difference between the two verbs is that you can only affect something already existing or in place, and you can only effect something new.

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RECOMMENDED READING
What Becomes of Kim?

by Steve High

As Nat Crawford observed in last month’s newsletter, characters in literary works remain with us after plots are forgotten. One reads great books, eager to reach the end—and then regrets the disappearance of a character who out of necessity disappears with the conclusion of the story.

In his 1901 coming-of-age novel Kim, Rudyard Kipling created a character who walks off the page, leaving us to wonder where he has gone and what has become of him. As observed above, readers want to reach the end of Kim, yet they don’t want the story to end.

Kimball O’Hara begins adolescence as “the little friend of all the world” and arrives at manhood as—what? An ordained Buddhist monk? An agent and professional liar for the British Indian Secret Service? Or something else?

Throughout the book, Kim follows the dangerous path of “The Great Game,” from India to points north to frustrate, through espionage, Russian designs on British India. At the same time, he walks as the chela (disciple) of Teshoo Lama, a mendicant Buddhist holy man. Even at the very end of the book, it’s not at all obvious how Kim resolves the personal conflict that these worldly and spiritual preoccupations must create.

In Kipling’s original manuscript, Teshoo Lama crosses his hands “as a man may who has gone through the Valley of the Shadow and knows what is beyond.”

But in a brilliant revision, which you can see in Kipling’s handwriting if you visit the British Library, Teshoo Lama smiles “as a man may who has won salvation for himself and his beloved.”

This deliberately ambiguous final sentence has set generations of readers to wondering what becomes of Kim.

My own feeling, which I offer only tentatively, is that Kim would not make a very good teacher of Buddhism.  At seventeen, Kim is too young to become a Buddhist priest, but as the lama thinks that Kim is already saved, he is too old to become a novice.  It is possible that Kim could without ordination become a lay follower (Upāsaka). To do this, he would have to keep the following vows:

  1. I will not take the life of a sentient being;
  2. I will not take what has not been given to me;
  3. I will refrain from sexual misconduct;
  4. I will refrain from false speech; and
  5. I will refrain from becoming intoxicated.

From what Kipling shows us of Kim, it’s hard to believe that he would not find all but the last of these commitments too difficult. He feels no regret for maiming the Russian spy with a groin kick except for wishing that he had not killed him. Nor does he regret having “swiped the whole bag of tricks—locks, stocks, and barrels,” as his colleague Hurree Babu describes Kim’s theft of the opposition’s papers. And although Kim rejects the advances of the “foul-faced” woman of Shamlegh, all of his previous behavior suggests that this handsome young man will have his “pickin’ o’ sweet’earts” and continue to take his fun as he finds it.

Finally, Kim’s job as a spy depends upon his ability to lie and deceive. And even when it is not part of his job, he delights in making up stories for his traveling companions just to pass the time. Mahbub Ali, the redoubtable Pushtoon who is Kim’s surrogate father, tells the lama in his oblique way that he has not found “a Red Hat’s charm for making him overly truthful.”

Although he is only seventeen at the end of the novel, it is impossible to regard Kim as other than an adult. Like a teenage combat veteran, Kim has seen more than enough of the world and its ways.

Indeed, the orphaned Kim as a child has seen much of what parents usually shield their children from: opium sellers, such as his stepmother; “young men of fashion,” for whom he carries illicit messages; and “frivolous ladies at upper windows in a certain street,” with whom by age thirteen he has “acquitted himself well.”

Despite the accident of his white skin, Kim has nothing whatsoever of the innocence of an English or Anglo-Indian schoolboy. He was “born in the land,” as Mahbub Ali says. Kim’s childhood is more like Mahbub’s than that of a European child; by age fifteen, Mahbub says he “had shot my man and begot my man.”

Mahbub observes ruefully that the Woman of Kulu, the Sahiba, also regards Kim as a son: “Half Hind seems that way disposed,” he says. It seems unlikely that Kim would reject his first genuine father’s advice as to his ultimate career.

Although jealous of the bond between the lama and Kim, Mahbub can “see holiness beyond the legs of a horse.” A devout Muslim after his own fashion, Mahbub nevertheless concedes that the lama is an indisputably “very good man.” When he learns that, as far as the lama is concerned, Kim “can yet enter government service”—for he needs him in six months north of Afghanistan in the middle of Great Game territory—he is content to leave Kim with the lama.

The book’s last sentence shows that the lama has no doubt that Kim will follow him in the path of The Way. And yet Kim himself seems as little moved by the lama’s description of his religious vision as he is by Father Victor’s talk of the Virgin Mary. She is to Kim only one of the many gods and goddesses of whom he has heard, and he sees no difference between the Christian saint and Bibi Miriam, by which name Mary is also respected in Islamic belief.

The lama is fulsome in his description of the paradise he has won for himself and Kim, but Kim expresses no concern for the lama’s soul—only for the “silly body” of the living, breathing Teshoo Lama. True, Kim has said that the Great Game can play itself out for all he cares, but this probably means no more than Hurree Babu’s claim that he will only study ethnology henceforth. It’s impossible to believe that this “fearful man” will not continue to find himself in more “dam’ tight places,” and that “Mr. O’Hara” and Mahbub Ali will be alongside.

Kim is not the only character about whose future one may wonder: Mahbub and Hurree, of course, but also the sensitive and wise curator of the Lahore Museum; Colonel Creighton, the singularly intellectual army man; and Lurgan Sahib, the mysterious trainer of agents—all are characters who live outside the confines of Kipling’s plot.

Kipling himself wrote no sequel. T. J. Murari’s The Imperial Agent follows Kim into the struggle for Indian independence. Once extremely hard to find, an inexpensive reprint of the book is now available on the used book market. Kim itself is right here on our site. Use it to improve your critical reading skills; you’ll find 787 “SAT words” identified in our edition. But above all, read to form a lifelong acquaintance with the “little friend of all the world.”

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